Week 11: Revision

This week I asked the students to look over their poems of the first ten weeks. To think about where they had improved and what they still wanted to improve. To note their favorite poems and consider why they picked it. Then, the students were to pick a poem that they felt they had not fully finished, and create a revised and expanded second draft. It worked well, and I was very impressed with the students' results.

From Ms. Gonzalez's Class:

We Real Cool
The Gang bangers
On the streets

We real cool. We
hunt that blunt. We
buy that beer. We
driving and flagging. We
striking and shooting. We
dislike and fight. We
jacking then packing.

We die before we even
say goodbye.

Cristina V.

Ain’t We Real Cool
Da Gang bangers
10 on the corner.

We skip school
We stick to streets
We smoke strings
We sing sin
We behind bars
Or 6 feet beneath
Ain’t we real cool

Christinea L.

We Real Cool
The 4 Players
11pm on the streets

We real cool. We
ditch school. We

own the streets. We
steal treats. We

even make our own beats. We
party hard. We

beat up geeks. We
go to jail soon.

Oscar P.


From Ms. Formisano's Class:

We Real Cool
The gangster kids

We real cool. We
lift laws. We

steal smoke. We
skip school. We

dress cool. We
gangbangers. We

drink ‘til drunk. We
behind bars.

Amor D.

We Real Cool
The people
On the streets

We are cool. We
skip school. We

stay late. We
break bonds. We

swear back. We
smoke stone. We

party all night. We
die fast.

Esmeralda Q.

We Real Cool
The gangsters
Walking down the street

We real cool. We
party cool. We
drink too. We
smoke cool. We
lurk late. We
swear. We wear
rubber bands.

We die soon.

From Mr. Lukas' Class:

We

We toke smoke. We
drink and don’t think. We

ditch, school is for fools, and
stealing is cool.

Fighting is tight,
hanging on the corner,
getting high.

Making decisions is killing
each other.
Have these problems gets
you in trouble.
One day we’ll die
next to each other.

Cynthia R.


We Real Cool
The Kool Boys
5 in the hood

We sip smoke, We
dare swear. We

skip school, We
don’t care. We

lurk late. We
drive straight. We
get dates.

We kill,
just to pay our bills.

Amber L.


We Real Cool
The Players
Three on the street

We real cool, school
is for fools. We

earn when we burn. We
toke smoke. We

stealing the ceiling.
We jamming July. We

hustle the streets. We
sleep soon.

Eric S.